Kevin and Jillian

Where should a person even begin to comment.  I really can't find too many flaws, and when I say too many, I mean any.  The paper was well thought out and developed.  It was well organized and informational and it was well written by two people, which isn't always the easiest thing to do.  The layout of the lists was a great way to let your reader take a break from just being overloaded with information.  Also, the study of Kevin's students was a good way to to really hammer in your point right at the end in a more local way.  Showing that it's going on everywhere not just in certain areas.  The idea of addictive gaming is becoming a bigger and bigger discussion as online gaming grows. One thing I might say would be cool to look at would be addictive traits of pc games vs. the addictive traits of console games.  see how the the people on each platform evaluate the addictiveness of a game.  I really thought this was an amazing paper

A+

Jacob

The thing I liked best about your paper was the way you interacted with your reader.  You would state your point and then would include a video concerning it.  It made you come off as very reputable.  Also, the linking between your points and paragraphs was well done as seen here....

Without the LED technology developed by the virtual boy, the Nintendo Wii would never exist.

It was a good way to show your readers, who may not know of the virtual boy or the N-Gage what exactly made them up.  This again can be said for your videos where you might describe in detail the flaws in these systems, but the videos really rang the bell for your argument.  Finally, your closing was another one of my favorite parts....

One day gamers will realize that some of the industries biggest failures were also great successes.

I just really liked that as an ending...that sentence really stuck with me and being a gamer, has led me to think about industry failures and how they have affected my gaming.

A