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Causal Peer Grades

Page history last edited by Jillian 14 years, 11 months ago

 

This round of peer grading was much more difficult for me. Not because of the quality of papers, but rather because I feel it is my best interest to be more critical in the grading process so as to better my own writing, as well. I closely examined the grading rubric so that I could be sure of expectations. While I was typing up these reviews I put myself in the grading mindset and am hoping that (and am fully prepared to) I receive the same honest and helpful comments I provided.

 

Michele: First of all, you did such a fantastic job of embracing the peer review you received. You definitely made the improvements some felt could better your paper – and they did. The expansion of examples used added so much to the topic and overall purpose of the paper. Your explanations also made it possible for non-gamers to read and understand it, while the examples kept gamers interested. There were few grammar and punctuation problems, and you implemented varying sentence structure which aided in the paper’s flow. Many, but not all of your paragraphs, had good lead-in sentences, which also affect the flow. The use of direct quotes or perhaps even some statistics may have added some unique and outside perspective. Links would have also been great (WIKI)!!! Overall, though, the paper conveyed your thesis very effectively, creatively, and interestingly. I enjoyed reading it and relating to it, for I have experienced many of the aspects you discussed. GJ Michele! ~ A

 

Aldijana: You chose a dark subject, but quite effectively shed light on it for your readers. You discussed a very broad range of examples and points, which all helped develop your thesis statement. The introduction contained pertinent beginning information but could’ve used a more attention grabbing first/second sentence. The conclusion would’ve benefited from less of a restating of the previous information and more of a, well, concluding afterthought. Your grammar and punctuation, as usual, was well in form, with very few errors. Statistics and more outside information, as well as using more links, could’ve benefited your paper. Implementing language that is attention grabbing and creative is very effective in a paper’s flow, though this wasn’t a happy subject to write on which can make doing that difficult. Overall, your paper was extremely informational, concise, and expressive in its meaning and purpose. ~ B

 

Nathan: I really enjoyed your discussion on the marketing tactics for these two comic book conglomerates. You incorporated many different option each implement for their own needs. Your introduction (pre- Dr. Connor's changes) could've benefited from a more attention grabbing thesis sentence rather than merely stating that both Marvel and DC use marketing as a crucial business tool. Be sure to have your introduction act as groundwork for your paper, setting up the whole. While the paper contained great examples, some, like Minx for example, were a bit lengthy and could've been simplified but still be made effective. The use of more links further adds to that effect. Your paper was very interesting in its explanation, however, and attention to the thesis. There were few punctuation and grammar errors, but the sentence structure did not lend much to the overall flow. Varying the lengths and styles of your sentences will definitely help that. Also be sure to use lead in sentences which connect your paragraphs- flow. I know it sounds like I'm bashing your paper but that it not my intention at all. I am merely passing on the myriad suggestions I have picked up over the years I have been writing. I truly loved the passion you included in your paper. Without it your paper would've lost its appealing and creative edge. GJ. ~B

 

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